Month: June 2026

This term we visited the Christchurch museum to look at the dinosaur exhibition. We also walked around the gardens and visited the Art Gallery.

When I first walked into the dinosaur exhibit at the museum, I felt happy because the displays were so much more i don’t know than I expected.
In my opinion, the most impressive dinosaur we saw was T-rex because it was interesting and cool.
Out of all three stops, I thought the it was cool was the best part of the day because i like it was cool.
While looking at the artwork in the gallery, I found myself drawn to a piece that made me feel happy and calm because it looked so beautiful and wonderful.
Exploring the botanical gardens was calm and happy because it was calming
I think going on school trips like this is a good way to learn science because it was good i like.

The museum people went to our school and showed us fossils and fossilised things it was fun.

Read the paragraph.
Use your list to complete four editing passes:
Pass 1: Spelling
Pass 2: Sentence Flow
Pass 3: Punctuation
Pass 4: Vocabulary
Using a red pen correct the paragraph.

Yesterday our class went to the beach it was a amazing day and everyone was excited. We playd games on the sand and looked for shells but the wind was very strong. “look at that huge wave” shouted max. Some students walked along the shore and some just sat and watched. I was happy because i found a shiny shell and it was realy beautiful. We had lunch then we went back to school and everyone was tired but happy.
On your blog describe the beach or the shell or waves or lunch using the 5 w’s
or explain how waves are formed or sand is formed or how tides work.
Use your list to complete four editing passes:
Pass 1: Spelling
Pass 2: Sentence Flow
Pass 3: Punctuation
Pass 4: Vocabulary
Make the corrects and post blog.

Students should find and fix:
Spelling: playd, realy
Capital letters: Look, Max, I
Sentence boundaries: missing full stops
Punctuation: speech marks, commas
Grammar: “a amazing” → “an amazing”
Vocabulary: walked, looked, happy, beautiful could be improved
Extension Challenge
Ask students to improve the paragraph further by:
Replacing at least three boring verbs
Adding one complex sentence using because, although, if, or while
Adding a sensory detail (what they saw, heard, felt, smelled, or touched)
Success Criteria
□ I completed all four editing passes.
□ I corrected spelling and punctuation errors.
□ I improved at least three words.
□ I added one complex sentence.
□ My final paragraph is easy to read and makes sense.

Editing My Writing
I completed all four editing passes
Pass 1: Spelling
Pass 2: Sentence Flow
Pass 3: Punctuation
Pass 4: Vocabulary
I corrected spelling and punctuation errors.
I improved at least three words.
I added one complex sentence.
My final paragraph is easy to read and makes sense.

I am going to describe the beach or the shell or waves or lunch using the 5 w’s or explain how waves are formed or sand is formed or how tides work.

Phase 2 Editing Challenge (Y4–Y6) Name: Peer:
Instructions:
Read the paragraph.
Use your list to complete four editing passes:
Pass 1: Spelling
Pass 2: Sentence Flow
Pass 3: Punctuation
Pass 4: Vocabulary
Using a red pen correct the paragraph.

Yesterday our class went to the beach it was a amazing day and everyone was excited. We playd games on the sand and looked for shells but the wind was very strong. “look at that huge wave” shouted max. Some students walked along the shore and some just sat and watched. I was happy because i found a shiny shell and it was realy beautiful. We had lunch then we went back to school and everyone was tired but happy.
On your blog describe the beach or the shell or waves or lunch using the 5 w’s
or explain how waves are formed or sand is formed or how tides work.
Use your list to complete four editing passes:
Pass 1: Spelling
Pass 2: Sentence Flow
Pass 3: Punctuation
Pass 4: Vocabulary
Make the corrects and post blog.

Yesterday, our class went to the beach. It was an amazing day and everyone was excited. We played games on the sand and looked for shells, but the wind was very strong. “Look at that huge wave!” shouted Max. Some students walked along the shore and some just sat and watched. I was happy because I found a shiny shell and it was really beautiful. We had lunch, then we went back to school and everyone was tired but happy.

Students should find and fix:
Spelling: playd, realy
Capital letters: Look, Max, I
Sentence boundaries: missing full stops
Punctuation: speech marks, commas
Grammar: “a amazing” → “an amazing”
Vocabulary: walked, looked, happy, beautiful could be improved
Extension Challenge
Ask students to improve the paragraph further by:
Replacing at least three boring verbs
Adding one complex sentence using because, although, if, or while
Adding a sensory detail (what they saw, heard, felt, smelled, or touched)
Success Criteria
□ I completed all four editing passes.
□ I corrected spelling and punctuation errors.
□ I improved at least three words.
□ I added one complex sentence.
□ My final paragraph is easy to read and makes sense.

Editing My Writing
I completed all four editing passes
Pass 1: Spelling
Pass 2: Sentence Flow
Pass 3: Punctuation
Pass 4: Vocabulary
I corrected spelling and punctuation errors.
I improved at least three words.
I added one complex sentence.
My final paragraph is easy to read and makes sense.

I am going to describe the beach or the shell or waves or lunch using the 5 w’s or explain how waves are formed or sand is formed or how tides work.

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I do it for winter sport is net ball it is fun to do I really like play net ball do you like playing net ball have you play net ball before and what  do you know about it.